Thursday, October 25, 2012

Patriot's Pen Essay


Author's Note: I really hate this essay, so just don't judge me. I'm actually writing a different one which will  be better.

Flag of the Founding Fathers

                 There are many amazing people who founded this great country, each one a single stitch in the red, white, and blue flag that proudly waves in the air. Think about it, if you could talk to those great heroes, what would you say? I would want to thank the Founding Fathers for everything that they done right for our country.
                 “Thank you for voting rights!” would be the first I would tell them. Voting  has let the people of U.S.A. have a say in who runs the country. Also, voting makes our voice be heard and gives people a decision to really think about.
In this way, we are different than other countries who don't get to choose, who might not even care about how their country is lead. Voting gives us hope in bad times because the candidates deliver well-thought speeches to give their message and we pick the one that we think can push America forward.
                 Voting was a good decision, but I would also say “Thanks for establishing everything”. I mean, making laws from the very beginning controlled what happened here. Creating the Declaration of Independence was perfect; It was like the official document that made this country a whole. As the founders established states and cities, they basically created the U.S.A. that we have today.
                 “ I mostly thank you for freedom.” We live in such a great country, and we barely know it. We are so lucky for a strong, developed, free country. This country is blessed by having so many freedoms like freedom of speech and freedom of religion. Citizens here are free to follow our their own paths and  are free to decide. Freedom overall was the best thing the Founding Fathers did for this country and without freedom, everything for us would be a lot different.
                 The beautiful flag that soars in the air shows our Founding Fathers, still looking over us. They created the amazing country that we have now. From the choices they have made and the things that they did, the Founding Fathers really knew what they were doing and we will never forget them.

2 comments:

  1. I really like the stitch part! I like how you connected it to the flag but maybe you could say something more of the flag since your going to talk about it. Over all its really good espesially with the intro!

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  2. Good Job on this essay! It was hard for everyone to write this and actually have fun with it. But somehow you made it work when you wrote your introduction and how you tied it back into your conclusion. I liked how you used real dialogue to show you were actually speaking to the founding fathers also.
    Great Job!
    -Meghan

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